Sunday, August 24, 2008

100 Words - Faster

I'm back with this entry for Velvet Verbosity's 100 Words Challenge. The prompt for this week: faster. And yes this continues the mysterious romance from Treasures (2) and Pillar, so if you haven't read those yet, you might want to go back first and catch up - this will make more sense then. Enjoy! Oh, and if you want to join in check out www.velvetverbosity.com .

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The pace of dissolution increased the longer she sang, and with it the speed of his heartbeat. He felt a pressure from inside as if his heart were trying to escape. Didn’t she know that he had carefully built these walls over years? Each stone a monument of silence, a barrier against pain. Or did it keep the pain in? With that thought it exploded! But each stone followed the sensuous curve of her melody and dropped in orderly rows forming a neatly paved bridge between him and her. She was beautiful! Now his heart beat faster for another reason.

7 comments:

LceeL said...

Lovely. Sensual. Erotic in a not smarmy way. I love it.

Patsy said...

Went back and read the other two --they are all breath taking. I want to know more.

Ash said...

Thank you, Lou and Patsy! I'm hoping to continue the story with subsequent challenges, so keep checking back. :)

Velvet Verbosity said...

Yes, lovely, just lovely. I always enjoy your pieces so much.

Ashlie- MommyCosm said...

That was beautiful.

MRMacrum said...

Women were born to sing. Men, well, they try hard. I too would like to see how "he" follows up on this.

Allison said...

Nifty!

I love the writing process. How some of these, I swear, just SPRING to life, sometimes almost whole when they come to mind. Like you can't type fast enough!

And I've got characters that recur. I can't wait to post the ones I'm behind on, Fresh and Faster. I have no idea if Evolution is going to fit in, I don't know. I've done enough writing for one midnight stint!

I NEED to get some sleep!!! I'll let you know when I've posted!